An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialize. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while others think people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In the era of evolution and development, using the internet to keep
people
together is a common aspect.
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it is believed by some it is
people
are
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beginning
bringing
together while others estate that social media is
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teaching
detaching
them
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socially
society
social
. In my opinion, I think, net facilities give vast advantages to the life with communication with others. On the one hand, social media is possible
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who
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in
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abroad to meet and share ideas and
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. In fact,
people
having
same
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interest
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can interact with each other in order to
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develop
devolop
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develop
their
relationship
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.
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, they relax their mind
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of work.
Moreover
,
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couples
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copples
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might meet through social applications
such
as
face book
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facebook
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and
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twitter
twiter
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twitter
.
For example
, recent research showed that social media resulted in an increase in the marriage rate
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of
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the
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countries.
On the other hand
, the internet simultaneously, created a barrier between real physical
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people
and
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skills practically and prefer to
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behind the
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screen
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screen
.
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, they become
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and
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of
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.
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, it is noticed that the younger generation
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from
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social
socal
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social
disorders and
choose
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to stay alone rather than interact face to face with other
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colleagues
colleges
collegues
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colleagues
.
Similarly
, teenagers tend to stay in their room
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period
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and avoid family time to win the games. In conclusion,
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nonetheless
,
internet
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makes and
mantain
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maintain
friendship and
advance
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advances
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communication
to
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the
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life, but their drawbacks like social depression need to consider and take into account.
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