In the era of evolution and development, using the internet to keep
people
together is a common aspect.
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it is believed by some it is
people
are
together while others estate that social media is
them
. In my opinion, I think, net facilities give vast advantages to the life with communication with others.
On the one hand, social media is possible
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who
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abroad to meet and share ideas and
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. In fact,
people
having
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can interact with each other in order to
their
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.
As a result
, they relax their mind
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from
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of work.
Moreover
,
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might meet through social applications
such
as
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and
.
For example
, recent research showed that social media resulted in an increase in the marriage rate
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countries.
On the other hand
, the internet simultaneously, created a barrier between real physical
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people
and
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skills practically and prefer to
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behind the
.
Thus
, they become
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and
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of
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.
For instance
, it is noticed that the younger generation
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from
disorders and
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to stay alone rather than interact face to face with other
.
Similarly
, teenagers tend to stay in their room
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and avoid family time to win the games.
In conclusion,
,
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makes and
friendship and
advanceCorrect subject-verb agreement
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communication
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life, but their drawbacks like social depression need to consider and take into account.
