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Some parents think parents should attend child care courses to learn how to take care of their children. Do you agree?

#parents #child #care #courses #children
a plethora of people
argue
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 that
parent
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 should attend where childcare
care
 programs in order to imitate how to take
care
children
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. I disagree with that statement because
parent
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the parent
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 has the ability to take
care
 of their
children
 since they are born,
therefore
 are many duties that
parent
 should complete in their
home
. There are several reasons
parent
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 do not need to go to their
children
's courses.
Firstly
,
parents
 have more knowledge to take responsibility for their
children
, because since their
children
 are the born
parent
 is the only one who nurtures
kids
, even though it will be difficult because
this
 is the
first
 experience but they will adapt easily to take
care
 of their
children
.
For instance
,
in
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recent research published that many
parents
 prefer to take
care
 of their
kids
 by themselves because
parents
 believe nurturing
kids
 are
parent's
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 responsibility.
Furthermore
,
parents
 will get a lot of time with their offspring
,
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 and can give more attention to their
kids
.
Secondly
,
instead
 of attending
children
's program
parent
 tend to finish their tasks at their
home
 while nurturing their heir.
Therefore
, a lot of information from YouTube, the internet and website that
parents
 can get in order to learn how to take concerned offspring properly.
In addition
,
parent
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 can utilize their time by doing another important duty.
For example
, in recent days many
parents
 especially mothers prefer to stay at
home
 to take
care
 of their
kids
 while doing other housework,
such
 as washing cloth, cleaning the floor and cooking meals. in conclusion, even though some
parents
 argue that they should attend
children
's courses in order to learn how to take responsibility heir properly, I believe that a large number of
parents
 prefer to spend their time at
home
 by upbringing scion while doing other jobs.
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