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"Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay"

#people #teacher
It is claimed by some that learning by themselves is better whilst others reckon that having a teacher is always
prefferable
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preferable
. In my opinion, learning alone is an efficient way of excellent understanding and provides long-term memorizing
skill
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 rather than working with
teacher
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. In
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recent times, via cutting-edge technologies self-study became
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popular and now, have a great impact on
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people who want to learn something in detail
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 diving into the information. Grasping some material,
for example
, in studying with self-education
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takes
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 creates a chance to investigate deeply, highlight everything clearly and
then
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 a considerable outcome.
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, it gives an opportunity to have
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control in order to learn any topics after some time. In terms of grasping something alone, one of the best ways is writing and
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 brings people
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 skill of teaching.
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, in the learning process, writing key points makes it fast,
thus
 in teaching, written points are provided by the mentor in order to
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 effectively and
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comfortable
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 noting procedure to the audience. To sum up, some reckon that a better approach is to learn by themselves while having a mentor is considered
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a desirable option. I strongly prefer to do self-study
everytime
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 and its benefits make positive contributions to not only my personal life
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 but
also
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educational
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