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The given maps depict the current layout of the university

sports

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centre and what will be planned. The university

sports

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centre will be completely modernized and will be expanded to make new rooms for new activities

such

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as dancing. Nowadays, there is not enough changing room.

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, a lack of leisure amenities is clear that will be considered for redevelopment. Considering the plans, the western outdoor court will be replaced with a leisure pool including a specific changing room. Comparing the gym

size

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with the future one, it will be rebuilt to increase its

size

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. The next new rooms are related to the dance studio. There are two dancing studios in the future layout that causes the

sports

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hall's

size

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will be decreased significantly. One more point, the

size

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, and position of the swimming pool comprising its changing room and seating will not change. The

last

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changes are related to spending more time during

sports

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activities

that

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apply

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cause to add

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sports

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of sports

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shop and

new

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a new

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cafe in

plans

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the plans

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, size with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

167 words

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The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

In some developing countries, people prefer to invest their money in businesses outside their own country. What are the reasons for this? What can governments do to change this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

University students should pay all the costs of their studies because university education benefits only individuals but not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that it is best to encourage children to have a healthy diet at school while others believe that parents should be the ones to teach children to have a healthy diet.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?