The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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The given maps depict the current layout of the university

sports

centre and what will be planned. The university

sports

centre will be completely modernized and will be expanded to make new rooms for new activities

such

as dancing. Nowadays, there is not enough changing room.

Furthermore

, a lack of leisure amenities is clear that will be considered for redevelopment. Considering the plans, the western outdoor court will be replaced with a leisure pool including a specific changing room. Comparing the gym

size

with the future one, it will be rebuilt to increase its

size

. The next new rooms are related to the dance studio. There are two dancing studios in the future layout that causes the

sports

hall's

size

will be decreased significantly. One more point, the

size

, and position of the swimming pool comprising its changing room and seating will not change. The

last

changes are related to spending more time during

sports

activities

that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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cause to add

sports

Change preposition

of sports

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shop and

new

Correct article usage

a new

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cafe in

plans

Correct article usage

the plans

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, size with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

167 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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