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Technology has made workers able to work at home. This brings lots of benefits yo workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The more the use of technological
communication
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 systems increases,the more people who are used to working from their
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home
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 get more
benefit
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benefits
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 from these systems.
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 the number of homeworking has increased dramatically through the years.
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, the homeworking system can provide flexibility and better
communication
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 with family.
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,these are the key point for advantages of working from
home
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 , people who
work
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 from their
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home
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 can enjoy their
work
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 with flexibility.As there will be no stress from their boss and have the chance to choose the working hours , places to
work
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 peacefully and food .
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, if the
worker
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 cannot get up early in the morning due to the heavy
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 at night ,they do not have to worry
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 their breakfast and about being late for office
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. And
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,the
worker
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 does not have a problem with the place to
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 in their house.In the office, they cannot choose their place whatever they want.
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,
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 can take a rest peacefully if they
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 from their
home
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.
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, They can manage their
time
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 with their best schedule without worrying about anything. For the
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 point, homeworking can increase
communication
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 with family members.Since
,
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 the
worker
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 no longer has to go to their office and
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 more than enough
time
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 for their family.
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,
the
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worker
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 who
have
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 children at
home
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 are able to spend their free
times
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 with their children and they can give the best attention to them. The
worker
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 has
time
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 to send and call back their children from their school.
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, their family and their relationship
is
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 getting better and better. To sum up,
the
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flexibility and better
communication
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 with their family are some of the benefits for the workers who have a chance to
work
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 from their
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home
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.Due to these advantages ,people are more likely to
work
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 from their
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.

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