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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situations outweigh the disadvantages?

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As we all know, youngsters are the future of every country and they play
vital
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 role in the development as they have more opportunities and time ahead.
On the other hand
,
elders
 have more experience and they have seen the world and know things better but personally speaking, In
this
 era, having more young people than
elders
 in a
place
 has more benefits than drawbacks and I will state them in my
further
 paragraphs. Having
large
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 amount of teenagers in a
place
 has numerous advantages as they have many opportunities to make advancements for the nation,
Such
 as they can choose their field of interest and can help the country to develop. They
also
 have responsibilities to take care of their
elders
 and the people who are in need.
However
, sometimes they can go off track because they are young and they can make harmful mistakes, which are hard to recover for the world.
On the other hand
,
presence
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 of more
elders
 in a
place
 has many pros as well.
For example
, they have their
lifetime
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 experience
about
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 certain situations and they can guide teens for their future and can educate them with life lessons. To sum up,
pros
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the pros
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 of having more younger people in a
place
 are more and
it
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outweigh
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outweighs
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 the fact that having
elders
 in a
place
 has more benefits and
less
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fewer
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 disadvantages.
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