In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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In many nations, buying a
house
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is more vital than
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an
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accommodation
accomondation
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accommodation
. It is unknown what the reason is, but I strongly disagree with
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statement. The main reason is we can own the
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for life and pass
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it down
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for
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next
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generations.
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, I have seen some of my friends
are
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owning a
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of them still
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a very young age as their grandparents gave them that
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in
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their will
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and the
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has been through a lot of generations before being under their hands.
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, they can fix or strip down or decorate the
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for their interest. The most primary positive aspect is people prefer comfy in their owned home than a rented
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accommodation
. People feel safer in their bought
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homes
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knowing that they will not lose
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place
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easily. On the other side, renting people stay in a worried state as they don’t know how long they could stay in that accommodation.
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,
a
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owned
place
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can
in
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a
lenting
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lending
state as its owner does not need it. Some companies like Airbnb, Booking, Agoda, ...etc,
they
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apply
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gain money by using those kinds of
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house
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houses
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or
apartment
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apartments
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.
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, there are some
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disadvantages
disavantages
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disadvantages
in buy a
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than
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a
place
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.
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of all, a
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is expensive. For somebody,
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may be a serious problem as their
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economy
ecomomy
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economy
aren’t
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stable.
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, when renting, you can easily switch to another
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, another city, or even another country.
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, my uncle is renting a
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near mine but he can fly to Ha Noi and lives there for the rest of his life without selling a single thing.
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, when they have their own money, they can buy the same
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that they rented in. In conclusion , I strongly disagree
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statement in the task.
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, I believe the choice and option
is
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are
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in
everybody
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everybody's
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situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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