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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society

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It is accepted by many
people
 that social networking sites,
for instance
, Facebook, have adverse effects on
people
 and the local community.
However
, while I firmly believe that
such
 platforms are advantageous for the individual, they will have damaging consequences for the local communities. There are numerous positives with regard to improving long-distance communication by using social media.
Firstly
, it helps anyone to be connected with their friends, family, and colleagues around the
world
 at any time.
In addition
 to
this
 parents don’t have to wait until their children send a postcard to see what is happening in their lives where users can share photos and videos of their experiences of the lives that they live.
Furthermore
,
people
 will get the opportunity to meet new friends from different countries, which will enable experience different cultures around the
world
 enabling them to communicate values and ideas from two ends of the
world
.
However
,
people
 becoming antisocial has been the biggest threat to societies.
To begin
 with, social media addiction will result in
people
 sitting in front of a computer or on their mobile phones excessively times which will make them in forgetting the outside
world
.
For instance
, the majority who are using eventually will evade talking to their neighbours or going for walk or to the local restaurant for a snack which will impact the local communities by improving camaraderie among them which will create a society with fewer values and care.
As a result
, it will create a society where violence, inhuman, and injustice prevail. To conclude,
although
 social media networking sites have had positive outcomes for the
people
 around the
world
 bringing them together, they have had not the same impact
for
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 the societies where it has had a detrimental impact on the well-being of the local communities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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