In many countries woman no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not repent the financial security that marriage country. To what extent do you agree?

Today
, we are seeing
woman
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women
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everywhere whether as
fashion
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a fashion
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model
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or CEO of the company. They are able to perform
same
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duties as like
mans
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men
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. Some people think that
this
job or business
behavior
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of
woman
have caused a decrease in
woman
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a woman
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getting married as they no longer feel
this
need for financial security. I partially
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with the statement. Both viewpoints will be elucidated in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, They don'
t
like getting married because they don'
t
want to share their
life
with someone else. To illustrate, One of the reasons for
increase
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in divorce cases is that they don'
t
like sharing their
life
with another person. They want to live their own
life
, in their own personal space.
In addition
to
this
, they want to spend their
life
with
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their parents
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as they don'
t
have any other person who can take care of them.
For example
,
Man
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go
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to
office
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to earn money for their
family
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families
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like
father
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their father
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and mother. They
also
want to do the same for their parents as there will
no
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one after her to take care
for
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them.
On the other hand
, Many
woman
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women
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are
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helping their husbands after getting married to establish their business
today
. To elucidate, My
friends
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friend's
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wife help him set up his
shoes
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business
today
by working in
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a retail
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store. Now, They both work
simantaneously
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simultaneously
and earn their living.
Moreover
, there has been
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increase
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in
couple
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a couple
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where
woman
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the woman
a woman
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works in
office
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an office
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and earn living while
man
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the man
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stays at home and perform household duties.
For instance
, According to the survey performed
last
year, there were more than ten
percent
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of couples where
woman
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a woman
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was earning living and
man
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the man
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were
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was
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managing
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the household
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household
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. In Conclusion,
Woman
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women
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have become so independent
today
that they are earning for their husbands and families.
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