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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #crime #prison #sentences #alternative
In
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 day and age committing a crime must always be accompanied by
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appropriate punishment.
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 of
people
 think that the optimal way is to prolong the time of confession. Others express the opinion that alternative methods are better. From my perspective, I consider that long years of imprisonment are more appropriate. On the one hand, it is considered that offenders should be severely punished by being put on long probation. It means that the recidivism rate will be reduced remarkably
as a result
 of the countless beatings and tortures administered by other prisoners without cause, which will progressively form conditions that prevent the offender from committing crimes again via the development of both fear and obsession.
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, the
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murderer
murder
 usually
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lifetime
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 prison sentence.
Thus
,
this
 has helped to eliminate the number of occurrences of crime.
On the other hand
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also
 need other better methods should be devised in which villains
such
 as labour rehabilitation. In my opinion, these
people
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service to the whole community during their imprisonment. The labour force from these criminals will be a great contribution to
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societies.It does not imply that these violent and dangerous
people
 will be released and walk around the inner city freely. They will be under strict observation.
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, they will be
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 the heavy chains and placed
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 construction sites to assist the building companies or they do community work like doing farmer's work which is seen as an act of atonement for the mistakes they make. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their opinions. I think that locking up lawbreakers for years is more advantageous as it discourages more crime and returns serenity and tranquillity to the community.
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