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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is an undeniable fact that even an evolution in farming can not
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 the needs of people all over the world.
However
, there are a number of reasons why authorities are unable to eliminate hunger in some countries.
This
 essay will
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 light on the causes behind
this
 notion
as well as
 how countries can alleviate
this
 issue. To commence with, as a globe, a number of reasons can be seen in the many different countries regarding
this
 notion. In most underdeveloped nations, the price of food is increasing at an alarming rate as compared to wages which are stable for most masses who are doing labour work.
For example
, In India, a majority of people are dying every day just because of hunger even though they have a lot of food
availability
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. The reason is they do not have a better transportation structure in some areas
such
 as bad road conditions making it hard for drivers to deliver meals. On the solution side, various measures can be taken by the local authorities so that every citizen can sleep freely without the worry of meals.
Firstly
, the government should find some better ways to transport cuisine items in countryside areas where even the transportation rules have to be properly developed because enough food supply can not reduce hunger if they do not have a superior delivery system.
Secondly
,
along with
 improving
this
 system, the government should
also
 provide education to people who live far from cities and are still self-reliant like catching the fishes and hunting. In conclusion,
although
 authorities have a variety of methods in
this
 technological world to improve agriculture, a lack of transport arrangements for the supply of foodstuff is becoming an obstacle.
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coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates some logical structure and presents an introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The essay provides a somewhat complete response, but lacks clear comprehensive ideas and relevant specific examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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