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The number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries are changing/ Give your oppinion describing the topic of mobile phones and landlines.

#phones #landlines #people #countries #oppinion #topic
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The graph shows us a picture of usage of mobile
phones
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 and
landlines
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 per 100 people in 6 dofferent
countries
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.
Firstly
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, there is a well noticeable trend that mobile
phones
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 are more popular in 4 out of 6
countries
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: Germany, UK, Sweden and Italy. The highest level of popularity of mobile
phones
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 is situated in Italy. Sweden is located at the
second
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 place. The UK is at the 3rd place. In opposite,
countries
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such
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 as Canada, the US and Denmark have the dominance of
landlines
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.
Moreover
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, Canada and the USA have a great gap between the number of mobile
phones
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 and
landlines
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.
Also
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, those two
countries
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 have the lowest level of the distribution of mobile
phones
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. All in all, we can see the differecne between 2 continents: Europe and North America. For 2
countries
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 from North America the statement that
landlines
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 more popular there is true. And contrary, for European
countries
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 mobile
phones
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 are more preferable choice.
However
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, we have only one exeption out of
this
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 rule: Denmark. It is an European country for which
landlines
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 are more popular than mobile
phones
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.
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