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Technological and scientific advances are changing the food people eat. Some believe that these are changes can be harmful to the health of the people. Others challenge this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in all fields, especially in the
food
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sector
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. A section of society thinks that technology in the
food
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sector
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 would affect negatively human well-being .
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, others opposed
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 by saying that these advancements are helpful for people. I personally believe that having
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 kind of progress in the
food
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sector
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 would be harmful to the public as
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 may affect the overall health of mankind. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the notions with relevant examples.
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 of all, there are a plethora of detrimental effects of changing
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 habits as altered
food
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 would not be digestible to some. To be more precise, in
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 type of
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, manufacturers may use some sorts of chemicals that would prevent
food
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 to get expired.
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, a recent survey found that 67% of people are suffering from disastrous health problems and the main reason, they have found the considerable amount of oil
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 used in order to improve the shelf-life of any packed
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.
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, they can catch some chronic diseases
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 as high levels of cholesterol, obesity, arthritis and so on.
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, some pessimistic people think the opposite of the above view. As they are supporting the entrance of technology into the
food
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sector
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, and think that it can bring an abundance of benefits. As we know, life is really hectic these days, and if they have genetically modified
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 to eat, they can preserve it in their fridges for a longer period of time. As a consequence, they can eat it according to their convenience.
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, in Japan, the majority of folks have adopted a habit to eat prepared
food
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 as they do not have much time to cook at home. In conclusion,
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 there are some benefits of genetically modified
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 to the public, in my opinion,
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 kind of
food
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 may impact badly on consumers' health and sometimes would become lethal.

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