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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Reading 1.Pre-reading a) When and where did you spend your
last
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 holiday? What did you do during your vacation? Which places did you visit? b) Where did you get
information
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 about that trip? (From your family? Your relatives? Your friends? Your colleagues? Social Media? Internet?
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 etc.) c) Do you feel satisfied with the
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 you have got? Why? or Why not? 2. Reading TOURIST
INFORMATION
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 OFFICES The
tourism
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 department operates
tourism
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information
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 offices in many origin countries. A
tourism
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information
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office
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 promotes
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 or builds, travel to a destination country through advertising and special promotional activities.
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, representatives of the
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office
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 give brochures about vacations, the destination country, and special tours to travel agents in the origin country. A brochure is a printed folder, or pamphlet, about a place, product, or company. Brochures advertising
tourism
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 are written, printed, and supplied to
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 offices in origin countries by the
tourism
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 department.
Mr.
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 Carter is the director (manager) of a
tourism
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information
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office
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. He has a large staff.
A staff
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 in a business
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 is a group of
people
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 who
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 together. The staff includes
people
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 who
work
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 directly with travel agents; others who do
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 with companies and businesses;
people
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 who contact newspapers and television and radio stations; some who
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 with airlines and hotels;
people
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 who write advertising; and
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 clerks and secretaries.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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