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More and more people are using computers and electronic devices to access information; therefore, there is no need for printed books, magazines, and newspapers anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In contemporary society, the technology and electronic
devices
 industry are growing rapidly, and that makes
people
 can access
to
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information more accessible than in the past. Some individuals think there is no reason to print the
media
 on paper because we can use electronic
devices
instead
. I extremely disagree with
this
 idea and
this
 essay will show the point that why I do not agree.
First
 of all, Using paper-based
media
 can make notes or mark something on it. Meanwhile, we cannot do it on the computer or smartphone because almost all websites or applications have non-editable protection,
for instance
, ook-bee or fictionlog.
Moreover
, we could not share some publishing or books with others since it has a copyright that does not allow the community to share their books across their accounts or
devices
.
Furthermore
, some online
media
 sources, can't be used in
place
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 that doesn't have the internet like mountains or forest.
In addition
, If we change to use 100 per cent of electronic or technology-based technology-based
media
, it will make more social and technological inequality between rich and poor
people
.
Also
,
people
 who don't have much money must work harder to buy the
devices
 that can access the information they need at a very high price.
However
, paper-based
media
 are much cheaper than technology-based that will make
people
 can access knowledge or information easily. To conclude, I did not agree that we should remove paper-based
media
 because
although
 technology-based
media
 make some groups of
people
 more convenient, it makes more inequality in our society and has many condition and terms to use.
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