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More and more people are using computers and electronic devices to access information; therefore, there is no need for printed books, magazines, and newspapers anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In contemporary society, the technology and electronic
devices
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 industry are growing rapidly, and that makes
people
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 can access
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information more accessible than in the past. Some individuals think there is no reason to print the
media
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 on paper because we can use electronic
devices
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instead
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. I extremely disagree with
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 idea and
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First
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 of all, Using paper-based
media
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 can make notes or mark something on it. Meanwhile, we cannot do it on the computer or smartphone because almost all websites or applications have non-editable protection,
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, ook-bee or fictionlog.
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, we could not share some publishing or books with others since it has a copyright that does not allow the community to share their books across their accounts or
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.
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, some online
media
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 sources, can't be used in
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 that doesn't have the internet like mountains or forest.
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, If we change to use 100 per cent of electronic or technology-based technology-based
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, it will make more social and technological inequality between rich and poor
people
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.
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,
people
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 who don't have much money must work harder to buy the
devices
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 that can access the information they need at a very high price.
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, paper-based
media
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 are much cheaper than technology-based that will make
people
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 can access knowledge or information easily. To conclude, I did not agree that we should remove paper-based
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 because
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 technology-based
media
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 make some groups of
people
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 more convenient, it makes more inequality in our society and has many condition and terms to use.
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