In the period of time, from the past to present people's life lifestyles have changed a lot. For example, nowadays most people migrate from villages to big cities, which has positive and negative consequences.

In the past, small counties were more populated than now, which had some benefits. At
first
, they knew more individuals and, had more communication with each other. So, they had more information about their problems and issues.
Also
, there
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more emotional
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. All of them, motivated people to support each other.
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, in small
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there were more organic and fresh fruits and vegetables that gave them more health.
Furthermore
, existing cheaper products and rent houses,
also
cleaner air caused them to cope with less financial and healthy problems.
On the other hand
, they had lived in spacious houses that most of them had
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yard
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, so, they could grow up some beautiful flowers and a variety of herbs, which
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of them helped people to be more satisfied and healthy.
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, most
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villages
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have interesting nature
such
as
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,
lake
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and river
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river
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and they are habitats of some amazing animals that gave their
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numerous spectacular sceneries.
Also
, living in small
villages
gave their friendly inhabitants a kind of relaxed lifestyle. And because of the lower rate of
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it prepared much more
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for its populations. I think there are many disadvantages
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related to finance, health and technology. Of course, people who lived in small
villages
had less communication with other cities'
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.
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there were
less
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modern houses and appliances, high tech
equipments
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,and
less
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welfare amenities
such
as healthy water, electricity and gas, equipped hospitals and professional doctors that
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of
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them
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can be really frustrating and hopeless. I believe that the most important issue is
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educational opportunities. In my opinion
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of living in small cities are pretty important and I prefer to live in
big
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a big
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city to achieve more educational
apportunity
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opportunity
and
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lifestyle and be more successful.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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