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Some people think parents should control the behaviour of children from a very young age but others think we should give them more freedom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #control #behaviour #children #age #freedom
It is common belief
amongest
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amongst
 most people that we should manage the attitude of kids while others have a different opinion that the kids should be better with liberty. I believe
both
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control
 and freedom together. We will discuss
both
point
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 of view. Children are like
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vase
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 at a
teenager
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 age. Whatever we teach them they learn and believe it whether it is good or bad. They
also
 learn
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 their
parents
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parent's
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 behaviour. They listen to their
parents
 and know their limitations. They
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 how to
control
 their action and reaction.
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 kids learn to respect their elders from their
parents
 or teachers.
On the other hand
, others feel that youngsters want more space.
Parents
 should not always
control
 them. Let them be self-independent.
parents
 give them authority that they should take decisions by themselves. few people believe that
young
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 generation can understand all things
by
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 their own experience. Elders should not strict
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them
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. In conclusion,
Both
point
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 of
views
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are
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 different. Many people
has
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 different
believes
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 but
both
 are important and
i
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 think that we should teach them
both
 how to
control
yourself
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themselves
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 in different situations and be aware of limits. youngsters
also
 know that they should not cross their
limit
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limits
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.
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