Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

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hope to archive
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on education and careers. So , they always try to
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things. It has
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of advantages . There are advantages We try to best things, We tend to work always, Children motivate for studies and make
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competition among friends etc... Even though , In my view there are disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Because of reason , many problems are created in the society and school environment. There are rapidly increasing most of selfish youngest in
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busy and synthetic society. So, these reasons will be attached to our
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to education to
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their
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. We do not think always about our surrounding
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we can create a beautiful country and
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