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Show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities

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The
island
 map shows a great difference after the new facilities were constructed for tourism. The basic change was building many new
accommodations
, which are organized as two large rings. They were built as six
accommodations
 on the west side and nine new
accommodations
 on the east side of the
island
 .A
reception
 was built in the centre of the
island
, between the two accommodation rings.
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 the
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sea a new restaurant was constructed near the
reception
. Swimming is now allowed on the beach. A Pier was added to the sea, so now boats can float around the
island
. A footpath was constructed between different facilities. Starting from the beach to the west
accommodations
 and ending at the
reception
. The
second
 footpath for the east
accommodations
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is a hundred meters away from the beach. A vehicle track was made from the Pier to form a circle around the
reception
 and continuing to the restaurant.
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