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n some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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 of the world, buying a
house
instead
 of renting one is very popular and vital for
people
 .there are several factors which can explain
this
 tendency. and in my opinion ,there are both advantages and
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 backs to
this
 choice .the upcoming paragraphs will
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illustrate
illiustrate
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illustrate
further
.
firstly
,it is way
economical
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 to purchase a
house
then
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than
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 to rent one ,
although
 buying a place can cost a lot
initially
 ,
on
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 the long term it can
saves
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a loads
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 of money .
moreover
, if the family
in
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 need or going through tough times they can simply sell it .so
its
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 like an investment .
secondly
, many
people
 tend to have certain standards and
disgns
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designs
design
 for their home .
For example
 ,swimming
pool
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pools
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 or
spacous
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spacious
 gardens and
this
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could only be
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applicable
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applicable
 in
ones
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 own crib.
Finally
 ,safety can play a role in
this
 ,
in other words
 ,
family
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families
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 with kids will most
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likely
liklely
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likely
 prefer to raise
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their
thier
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their
kids in a
house
 that they
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choose
chose
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chose
 and
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designed
desgned
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designed
. In my perspective ,the main
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benefit
benfit
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benefit
 of
this
 situation is the
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settlement
settlment
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settlement
 and
quiteness
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quietness
 that come from owning a
house
 .because usually these homes are far from the loud crowdy life of the city.one can indeed enjoy his time with family and
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neighbours
 in peace .on the other side ,renting a
house
 can allow
people
 freedom of movement .
for instance
 ,
people
 who constantly have to move their
work place
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 can find renting a much practical choice . to conclude. owning a property is prefered by many
people
 due to several reasons.and I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
this
 choice comes with many advantages ,but
also
 some restrictions
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