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Some people believe that car-free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Automobiles are one of the major sources of
air
pollution
 which some
people
 think if we do not use them the weather will be better while another group believes it is not helpful and to reduce
air
pollution
 other ways can be more useful. In my opinion,
car-free
days
 are a good notion to fight against
pollution
 but it is not enough to keep the
air
 clean. On the one side, groups of
people
 believe for keeping our
air
 clean we should use the
car-free
days
' technique, which means, on that day
instead
 of using our vehicle we can walk or ride a bicycle,
also
 public transportation can be a good idea.
For example
, if we make half of our
days
 in a month
car-free
, the
air
pollution
 will produce at the end of the month will be half of the other months.
Thus
, banning our vehicles can be an interesting way to keep our weather clean.
On the other hand
, other groups think if we do not use our car in a day can not be helpful while other measures and factors should be done.
In addition
, if
people
 repair their
cars
 or buy electric
cars
 there is no place to worry about
air
pollution
.
For instance
, the government should help in financial ways for their
people
 to upgrade their
cars
 to electric versions,
as a result
, there is no need to have
car-free
days
 because there is no
air
pollution
 anymore. To conclude, other ways to deal with
air
pollution
such
 as using electric
cars
 can be a better way to deal with
air
pollution
instead
 of not using them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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