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Some believe that traffic problems in cities can best be resolved by investing in urban infrastructure while others feel there are superior solutions. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Traffic
 congestion is an increasing concern in urban areas. While some believe that funding infrastructure can improve the current situation others are of the
opinion
 that there are better alternatives to resolve growing concerns of over-jamming vehicles. In my
opinion
, increased funding can only offer a temporary solution
thus
 seeking other measures can better stabilise the situation. Supporters of investments firmly believe that renovation and reconstruction can improve over congestion of roads, thereby getting
traffic
 in control.
For example
, widening roads, building bridges, vertical home expansion, and sea-link pathways can improve overcrowding.
However
, with the rise in population due to overcrowding of
cities
, migration of people from rural to urban areas and increased concentration of job opportunities in
cities
 better infrastructure will not be able to withstand the problem.
Hence
in
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 my
opinion
, financing these projects will not improve the current situation.
On the other hand
, the government must deep dive into the root cause of the problem and bring in policies and reforms to put an end to
traffic
 jams in developed areas.
For instance
, one vehicle policy, providing employment opportunities to underdeveloped
cities
, rural development etc.
Such
 measures will evenly distribute the population thereby minimising the concentration of vehicles in a particular area which in turn will reduce
traffic
 jams in
cities
. To conclude,
although
 funding infrastructure projects may seem an easier solution to deal with the plight of
traffic
 in the
cities
,
this
 may not be the ultimate solution to the problem.
Therefore
 adopting other forms
such
 as rural development, and vehicle policies may bring better hope to dealing with
traffic
 problems in
cities
 in my
opinion
.
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