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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems- To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language #problems-
It is often argued that being a resident of a nation where the individuals have to
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Emerson some antisocial nuisances which can affect
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society to a great extent along with some serious issues. I ,
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, disagree with
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first
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higher
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 opportunities along with
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better job choices
world wide
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For instance
, the language interpreters jobs
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 are
on
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 high demand at the international level as it provides a very good salary or
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Such
 work does not demand any high degrees
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 has to complete any certified course within
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shorty
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 period of time and can easily earn good payment monthly.
Secondly
, it has been observed that learning or communicating in different languages aids intelligence and creativity among
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youngsters and teenagers . The great psychologist
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 Caltrop at Auckland University conducted a survey and mentioned that scholars who communicate in various languages get better chances to learn
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diverse
divested
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diverse
culture
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 and traditions globally. Summing up, communicating in
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diversified
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diversied
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diverse
 languages
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 affect the local communities
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 it plays a significant role to bring the local and
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