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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #buildings
It is fact that every
country
 has
histroic
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historic
 sides and moments. There are some who feel it has less value and government pulls it down. In my opinion, these are the greatest assets of every
country
 and citizens should
respect
 them.
First
, if we will see that historic
things
 are priceless to their
country
. Tourist comes from all over the world to a specific area to see their
things
for
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,for
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 example, visitors especially comes to visit their classical building,
things
 etc.
This
 is a great source for
country
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the country
a country
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 to generate income. Tourists become happy and return to their
country
 back.
For example
,
people
 from all over the world visit to Taj Mahal, which is a great Indian historic building. Indians
respect
 them and can't imagine breaking
this
 building.
Country
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The country
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 increased
income
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its income
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 because of these old
buildings
. I agree that we should not break these historic
buildings
.
On the other hand
,
people
also
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are also
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 interested to construct new modern
buildings
. Most
people
 have no
respect
 for their old cultural
buildings
. They want to construct new
buildings
. They don't know the value of antique
buildings
. I feel bad for these
people
 and
country
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the country
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 because they don't know that they are losing something valuable which they get to know the letter.
For example
, if they break all these kinds of building the
tourist's
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tourist
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 majority decreases and the income of that
country
also
 decreases. I do not agree to build modern
buildings
instead
 of old
buildings
. In conclusion, we explained both sides of the essay, We should always
respect
 old
things
 may
it
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they
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 be
buildings
,
people
 etc. I agree that we should build modern
buildings
 but we should not break old
buildings
 as well because these old structures are an identification of the
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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