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Question: in recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#years #people #e-books #paper #books
Getting updates on what is going around the globe mostly depends on reaching out
information
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on
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 magazines,
newspaper
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newspapers
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,
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Internet and many more. Fortunately, finding information on the Internet is
in
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at
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high
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a high
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 rate nowadays which
transcend
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transcends
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 paper
books
. There are downsides and upsides
on
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e-
books
 and hardcopy
books
.
This
 essay will highlight the merits
on
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 electronic
books
 denoting the reasons
it
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they
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outweigh
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outweighs
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the demerits because
,
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 one can have easy access and
sharing
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share
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 content with
the
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e-
books
. On the one hand, individuals can get news or
e-
books
 on the Internet
with
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by
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 just clicking. It's
very
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in
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lesser way to get a book by visiting search engines and
type
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typing
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 in what you looking for.
Long
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The long
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 journey of trying to get a
hardcopy
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hard copy
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 can be very tiring because one
have
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 to walk for miles.
For instance
, a colleague at the University of Nigeria was able to find a book he has been going to and fro on the website
with
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by
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 just typing in the topic of the content. Where he can open it wherever or whenever he wants to read it.
On the other hand
, another upside to
e-
books
 is that
,
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 it has
a sharing proceedings
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sharing proceedings
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. Sharing an important electronic book is in
simple
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the simple
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 process
thus
 finding, copying and
share
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 in lieu of pamphlets in which you have to find
it
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difficult especially when the other person is far away from you.
For example
, I came across
an information
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information
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 on a site where it was having a vital link of words to our project we were working on
in
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on
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campus
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. I just copied and pasted it
in
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on
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 our platform for those who were not in our midst
got
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to get
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 hold of the intelligence. In conclusion, I stand greatly with the opinion that
,
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 preference
on
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for
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e-
books
 over hardcopy
books
have
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has
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 more advantages than
the
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disadvantages as it's easily accessible and
also
 can be shared to large groups at a time.
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