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Foreign visitor should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Introduction
Most travel
attractions
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increasing
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these days due to the global development
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Some people think that
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history
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historical
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attractions
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 should
to
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apply
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require
higher
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a higher
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enter
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entry
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 fee
on
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for
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foreigner
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foreigners
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 than local people . in my opinion , I
don’ t
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agree
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this
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 idea because it’s not helpful for the development of historical
attractions
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Body paragraph 2
On the one hand , To increase the price of historical
attractions
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 will
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contribute
comtribute
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contribute
 to the fall of
foreigner
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Body paragraph 3
that will reduce the knowledge of
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foreigner
foreigners
forenigner
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foreign
to
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about
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 local culture and
history
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,
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because Visiting
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historical
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history
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attractions
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good
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 way for
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a foreigner
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foreigner
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foreigners
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to get knowledge
on
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of
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 other
countries'
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countries
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culture
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cultures
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 and
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history
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histories
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.
Conclusion
for
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example
examle
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example
,
Nanjin
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Nanjing
 has a gallery which recorded people
be
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killed by
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Japan
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last
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century
centure
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century
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attract
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attracted
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 a lot of
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foreigner
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foreigners
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 due to free
enterment
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interment
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