Foreign visitor should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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increasing
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popular
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these days due to the global development Some people think that
history
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attractions
should
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require
higher
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enter
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fee
on
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foreigner
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foreigners
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than local people . in my opinion , I
don’ t
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agree
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this
idea because it’s not helpful for the development of historical
attractions
On the one hand , To increase the price of historical
attractions
will
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contribute
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contribute
to the fall of
foreigner
that will reduce the knowledge of
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foreigner
foreigners
forenigner
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foreign
to
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local culture and
history
,
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because Visiting
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history
attractions
is
good
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way for
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a foreigner
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foreigner
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to get knowledge
on
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other
countries'
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countries
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culture
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cultures
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and
history
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histories
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. for
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examle
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,
Nanjin
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Nanjing
has a gallery which recorded people
be
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killed by
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Japan
in
last
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century
centure
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century
has
attract
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a lot of
foreigner
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due to free
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interment
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