Some people think that the government is wasting on arts that this money could be spent elsewhere to what extent do u agree or disagree with this
Arts bring
people
closer. Art
forms help people
to express their feelings and I agree with Correct article usage
the governments
governments
initiative in investing money in arts.
Change noun form
government's
Firstly
, countries are divided by borders and nationalities but there are several art
forms like music, dance and painting which brought countries closer. This
is a medium through which all the personal insecurities and political tensions can be expressed, and peace can be maintained across the globe. To exemplify, India and Pakistan have an age-old history of partition and the anger between citizens for each other is immense but both nations share the same language and music which has brought them closer and several treaties have been signed by governments
to keep this
free flow of artistic relation. Moreover
, this
has not only improved their existing scenario but also
transformed the mentality of the young generation.
Secondly
, governments
have become more active in dealing with this
situation by allowing youngsters to travel overseas and learn modern art
forms. They also
have access to modern technologies like computerised instruments, software and social media platforms which can help to create a global mark and reach out to the masses. People
all around the globe travel to see different cultural heritage sites and see old paintings which not only boosts tourism but also
improve
nations' stature. Correct subject-verb agreement
improves
For example
, the painting of the Mona Lisa in Paris,
is visited by more than 200,000 Remove the comma
apply
people
around the globe in a year which has helped people
understand the significance of the French revolution. Furthermore
, every nation has its own historical background which acts as igniting fire from which new art
genres can be easily derived.
Lastly
, governments
should allocate more funds to build multi-cultured educational institutes which can be useful for future generations and can act as a launchpad. To conclude, citizens worldwide should participate and encourage the government to invest more in an artistic initiatives
to maintain global peace and the advancement of the human race.Correct the article-noun agreement
artistic initiatives
an artistic initiative
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