Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many
countries
have
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known to sporadically face an economic downturn which some may call a recession. The developed
nations
are faced with major problems including but notwithstanding unemployment, poverty, healthcare and other socio-economic
crisis
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crises
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.
Thus
, it is not their responsibility
in helping
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to help
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those suffering from a downturn. I completely disagree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I
would
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analyze both sides of the argument and draw a conclusion from them.
Firstly
, many developing communities and
third world
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third-world
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regions depend abundantly on their natural resources as a key contributor to the GDP. As commodity prices are dependent on the consequent raw material rates,
this
could lead to a sharp surge or wane in the economy depending on the demand and supply.
Furthermore
, there could be various reasons for a crisis including corruption and a housing bubble.
For example
, when the crude oil price faced a negative decline, many major companies went insolvent and
as a result
, many states had to increase the cost of commodities available to the public.
Thus
it is imperative for the developed population to uplift and
gives
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a helping hand to the
countries
which have been struck by the recession.
On the other hand
, the developed
countries
are competing with each other to improve healthcare and technology including building some of the tallest skyscrapers. The society which is facing a downturn has not assessed or foreseen the situation
due to
lapses in the various benefits provided to its citizens.
Although
the
nations
have their own problems to take care of, I agree that in times of crisis, it is better to offer support to the
countries
in need since the world is connected through maritime trade. In conclusion, since many
nations
are interdependent on each other and since there are various immigrants to the population dependent on the economy, the developed
countries
must provide the technology and healthcare available to offer financial support to the third-world
country
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countries
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.
This
would promote more integrity and diversity for the smooth operation of trade between the
nations
.
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coherence cohesion
Create stronger connections between sentences and paragraphs to improve overall coherence and cohesion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic downturn
  • prioritize
  • solving
  • assisting
  • long-term benefits
  • international cooperation
  • economic stability
  • providing aid
  • diplomatic relations
  • supporting
  • less developed countries
  • overall
  • global economic growth
  • balancing
  • national interests
  • global responsibilities
  • crucial
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