More people are now behaving more violently in society than before. Can this behaviour be prevented? Discuss the causes and reasons for this trend. Provide examples to support your opinion.

In globalization and modern ,life everything is made for more comfort. Of course, the education sphere is up to dating
also
. Everyone can get knowledge from the internet or TV. But I strongly believe that the role of
teachers
is irreplaceable, despite the many benefits of the internet or other sources. The period of education for me is the main part of life which determines the future. For
this
,
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I prefer taking essential knowledge from a
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qualified
teacher who has professional skills. As I know tutors from school or university were educated not for their narrow specialization only, but they are good psychologists at the same time.
This
helps to determine the loyalty of
students
and teach in the right way. In my opinion, it is more productive to give information according to the mental and emotional state  of the student.
Moreover
,
teachers
can identify
student's
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weak sides, point out their mistakes
then
finally
set individual programmes. Even by analyzing and giving correct ,
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they are able to develop
students'
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student's
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  own skills, which the computer is definitely not capable of.  One more reason for my agreement is the classroom atmosphere. In special education ,location the attention of
students
is rightly toward
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learning material, and there is less chance of being disturbed.
Furthermore
, group tasks, working with
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and
spirit
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of rivalry help increase and fix up a new theme, certainly
teachers
observe and manage
this
process. The school environment and
teachers
' professionalism motivate
students
and make them confident.  I think
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it's  very important at the beginning of the learning path.  In conclusion, it appears that it's  possible to find everything on the internet.
However
, I'm  sure, that knowledge should be taken under supervision, and coached by professionals.
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  • violent behavior
  • society
  • prevention
  • causes
  • trend
  • exposure to violence
  • media
  • positive role models
  • psychological issues
  • socioeconomic factors
  • proper education
  • values
  • peer pressure
  • neglectful parenting
  • substance abuse
  • social support
  • community cohesion
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