The most school offers some type of physical education program to their students. Why is it important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?

Physical education
are
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having an important part of
school
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curriculum, It keeps
student
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students
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mental and physically fit. It should be required in every
school
. We will discuss and explain
PE
in
this
essay. Nowadays physical education is not provided in all
schools
because many
schools
are not focused and
this
also
plays a major part in
schools
. They focus on studies but
PE
is
also
a part of
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school like
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studies. Most
schools
offer
this
programme.
This
plan plays an important role in
student
life. Every
student
should be healthy and active if they participate
PE
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classes on daily basis. It improves the stamina of the body and keeps the mind refreshed. It prevents students of different
kinds
of diseases and disorders.
For example
, if children do exercise on daily basis like in
school
, it keeps them fresh. able to think more, more active etc. so I think every
school
should provide
PE
classes that make
student
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healthy and fit.
On the other hand
, most
schools
are not provide
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these
kinds
of programmes and as a
,
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result people are not physically fit. They are involved in different
kinds
of diseases. They are not mentally active to do any work.
For example
, if they don't care about health and body and they don't do exercise regularly, they become lazy and dull. In the class, they are not active and present mind. As the result, their marks will become low. In conclusion, all
schools
should offer these
kinds
of plans.
This
should be required for every
student
to keep them fit and active in class and at home as well. If the children get energetic and
more
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power to think, work and create,
parents
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get satisfied and happy.In my point of view, I agree that
schools
also
provide
PE
classes for every
student
.
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