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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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 happiest during
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 period while others believe that
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adulthood brings more happiness
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 greater responsibility. In my opinion, I believe that young
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 are happiest than adults.
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 all, from an economical point of view,
teenagers
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 the conditions that
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daily life.
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 do not know the facts that affect the
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 economy
such
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although
 it is very common that young peoples
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 some jobs in the present times, most
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teens
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 do not have financial responsibilities like
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 or housing
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 owing to their parents affords these
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. Another good reason to state that
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teenagers
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 years are the best times in
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lives
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 is that during school periods young students are focused mainly
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 the academic environment,
consequently
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teens
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 their life in a happy scenario in which
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connected activities like
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 championship, music festival and even scientific competition represented the daily duties that young peoples should deal with.
Finally
, from a social perspective
teenagers
 most fear
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social concepts or discrimination,
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, they live as they consider.
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, most
teens
 are involved in sports activities and
volunteeries
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volunteer
volunteers
volunteering
 organizations as well.
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undoubtedly
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 very common among young
people
 rather than adults. In conclusion,
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teenagers
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 years are the happiest for most
people
duo
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 to the activities that normally do. There are
not
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worriers
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 about current affairs like oil markets or political situations.
Teenagers
 commonly are not influenced by social gossip.
In addition
, school times are very important
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teens
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 ages because
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 positive influence that it has
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