Globalization is creating a world of one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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globalization
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of the
world
and eliminating national identity.it goes without saying, that in many cases the globalized
world
, we are living in, happens at the expense of local traditions. The earth is full of
people
who express indifference to local customs in favour of embracing global ideas, but luckily, there
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who see the value and importance of maintaining them. I strongly believe that we must preserve our traditional way of life. At the outset,
globalization
has influenced modern
people
a lot. Technology and social networks e part of our daily life, which seem to dominate the leisure time of youngsters, whether it
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means of gadgets or the internet.
As a result
, some local trends became global trends sometimes at no time at all.
For example
, during the Pandemic,
such
applications as TikTok became mega popular.
People
just make and post funny or curious videos of themselves and
people
all around the
world
are watching them and copying their trends.
In addition
, in the majority of videos, you can hear just English, which is obviously the language of the
world
but it makes other languages less important on
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international platforms.
Moreover
, nowadays
people
prefer listening to Maluma, Karol G and Rosalia rather than local singers, who are
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part o their local
culture
. Youth enjoy trying new foreign food more
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eating typical traditional recipes
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because they see them as dull or old-fashioned stuff.
However
, personally, I think that it would be a great mistake to forget about our own
culture
and tradition
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because it will become one vague
culture
with no clear customs and traditions. Though, it
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and
globalization
is getting stronger and stronger day to day, as
people
travel a lot and use modern technology and
that is
great actually. we should meet different cultures but that doesn’t mean that we should forget about our roots. So we must celebrate typical holidays, cook traditional food and have those simple typical for u country conversation in order to preserve our local
culture
from extinction. By the way, regarding music, if we take a look at Rosalia’s music we will see that her art embodies various musical styles like R&B, art pop, flamenco and reggaeton so she managed to adapt to the
world
of
globalization
without losing her cultural identity. In conclusion,
although
, I totally agree that
globalization
is destroying national identity by saying that there is no space in their lives for outpaced things from the past and there is no better thing than being the man of the earth. I strongly believe that we must do our best to preserve our local civilization in order for our ancestors can enjoy it and see the way we used to live. But I have to admit I would struggle without the Internet nowadays as I got used to it.
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