Some countries have implemented mandatory community service programs for young people. In these programs, children aged 16 to 18 do charity works, help old people or work with animals. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this for young people?

Presently
community
services by juveniles are made compulsory by the governments in many countries. The services like helping old-aged
people
, working with some animals and other charities are part of the
community
service
. In
this
essay, we will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of participating in serving
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society and understand why there are plenty of advantages.
Firstly
, young men and women will receive an immense live experience of serving the needy, which will develop a character of helping nature which can attribute to personal development. For an instance, in the year 2018, children who joined
youth
service
corporations, and helped old age
people
to get to their hospitals and meet their children
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actively participated by their will in the year 2020 pandemic to help old-aged
people
to get into isolation centres and get proper medical care who have been contacted with Covid 19.
This
service
has been acknowledged and appreciated by the prime minister of
UK
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.
Hence
this
community
service
will develop
the
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kind nature which stays for life long
also
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not to forget the weightage
this
could bring to CV. Many organizations give special reservations in interviews to
youth
who served
community
service
programs in many countries. The disadvantage of
this
program is reluctance by the
youth
. Many children think of
this
as a rewardless, thankless job. In the UK when the
service
was
first
incorporated as a voluntary
service
, only 5% showed
the
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interest out of the complete
youth
population in the country. When a survey was conducted to know the reasons, the response was they are not being paid or there is nothing they are going to gain from
this
service
.
Hence
most
people
did not like to join right now that mindset has been changed.
Although
, the advantages outweigh the mere disadvantages,
but
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to emphasize again these works
helps
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help
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in developing a kind
helping
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nature and develop the self-instincts that will stay throughout one's life .
Therefore
in my opinion
this
has
greater
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advantage and should be made compulsory by many countries
that
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youth
should
partcipate
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participate
in
community serving
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programs.
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