Some people say that we should invest more money in classroom technology and equipment. Others argue that we should spend this money on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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your goal and for better
education
children
need good
technology
and
teachers
. Few individuals say that they should invest in
classroom
technology
and
equipments
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and others they should spend
money
on good
teachers
. in
this
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I will discuss both here and give you my opinion on trai paragraphs.
To begin
with, investing
money
in
classroom
technology
and equipment is
best
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way for
children
to learn in
this
modern era. To elaborate it, with introducing new
technology
children
can focus more and give their all in
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without any disturbance.
For example
with new
technology
in
classes
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student
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avoid unnecessary absents and
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throughout classes.
As a result
,
children
learn new things that help them in
this
era.
That is
why
new
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technology
is needed in classrooms.
Furthermore
, few folks
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thing
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think
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that investing
money
in
best
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the best
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teachers
is necessary.
Moreover
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with
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giving good
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to
Teachers
, they give their all to educate the
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children
childrens
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children
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with care.As
a
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example will satisfy with
good
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salary they can take
children
without any negative thoughts. With
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and care given by
teachers
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children
can ask any question related to
education
and personal life and
teacher
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the teacher
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can guide them
in
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right
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path. That way
see
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you individuals think that spending
money
on
Teachers
is beneficial. In my opinion, both
view
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is right because only
giving
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student
best
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the best
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technology
in
classroom
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the classroom
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but no good teacher to guide them the
technology
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merits.
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goes
to
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teacher
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too. To sum up, for better
education
the
classroom
with
best
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the best
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technology
and
teachers
is needed.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Classroom technology
  • Interactive whiteboards
  • Tablets
  • Educational software
  • Online resources
  • Learning styles
  • Inclusive learning
  • Personalized education
  • Dependency
  • Mental arithmetic
  • Salaries
  • Training programs
  • Professional development
  • Retain
  • Skilled educators
  • Inspire
  • Motivate
  • Guide
  • Balanced approach
  • Educational ecosystem
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