Some people think that all entertainment TV programmes should educate people about the importance of social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This

problem

is a

problem

that I can observe from a person in my family who teaches at Kasetsart

university

by teaching in the

field

of Information and Communication Technologies-ICTs.

Last

year, he retired from teaching and the department announced the recruitment of a new teacher to replace

this

position

that is

still vacant by announcing the qualifications that must have completed

this

field

at the doctoral degree level from abroad in order to save the budget of the

university

that has to send a teacher to study from abroad. As time has passed, the department has not yet been able to obtain a new teacher that has all the qualifications announced. From the survey data, it was found that in Thailand, there were only 806 teachers who graduated in the

field

of Information and Communication Technologies-ICTs from 2006-2014.

However

, from 2015 to 2024, higher education institutions in Thailand required 3,081 teachers who graduated in

this

field

(

wittaya

Correct your spelling

witty

Jiaraphan Somsak Wongpanyathaworn Apichai Pantasen, 2020).

Therefore

, it can be observed that

this

field

still has a

problem

with the number of instructors that must be increased in order to match the demand in

this

field

in the future. I know

this

is a

problem

because the shortage of instructors in

this

field

has an impact on the number of graduates at the bachelor’s, master’s, and doctoral degrees, and

also

the amount of research at the doctoral level.

This

problem

is significant because decreasing the amount of research produced by professors at the

university

has an impact on the capability of ranking research of institutions in Thailand. According to data in 2017 from SCImago Institutions Ranking (SIR), Kasetsart

university

was ranked 406, but in 2020 Kasetsart

university

was ranked 412 ().

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think that all entertainment TV programmes should educate people about the importance of social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many graduates want to start their first job in a big corporation. Many others prefer to work for a small company first. What are the different advantages in each decision?

Topic 3: Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

School teaching should focus on success on the workforce and less attention should be given to academic achievement , to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around?