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Some people believe that violence on television and computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, young children, as well as adults, are favoring violent TV programs and violent computer
games
.Even young kids who are into
such
games
 tend to meet with their friends online, not in person, in order to play online
games
 together, like a shooting
game
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 and a fighting
game
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. In my view,
violence
 in fiction has a bad impact on
the
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society. In the following sections, I would like to state my opinions. I believe that it severely influences on young generation. Children are not able to distinguish between reality and fiction well since they are not mature enough.
This
, those who usually see fiction in the fictional world might be violent or aggressive at school.
Moreover
, people use dirty words, like "kill you" or "fuck you", especially while they are playing violent
games
, so they might offend someone with their words in reality.
In addition
, even adults who prefer
such
 aggressive entertainment are more likely to violate social rules.
On the other hand
, if the
violence
 on TV and in
games
 looks more fictional and unusual, it can let people aware of how dangerous it is and notify them that
violence
 is not supposed to exist in
our
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real life.
Additionally
, for adults who are busy with their work every day,
this
 kind of entertainment can make them feel different and relieved from everyday life.
However
, I suppose that it had few pros than cons. To conclude, I believe that
violence
 on TV and in
games
 affects
the
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society in a bad way. We need to consider
about
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this
 problem in order to control violent behaviours in our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • desensitize
  • empathetic response
  • aggressive behavior
  • formative years
  • impressionable
  • catharsis
  • media psychology
  • mixed results
  • family environment
  • genetics
  • regulatory bodies
  • rating systems
  • vulnerable demographics
  • inappropriate content
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