There is a problem with the changing room in your gym. You reported it several times, but it was not resolved. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter • Describe the problem. • Explain what the gym’s response was when you reported the problem. • Say what you would like the manager to do about the problem. Write at least 200 words to express your ideas clearly by using various structures and vocabularies.

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Dear Manager, I’m writing

this

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letter because I have an important

problem

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with changing

room

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Firstly

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, lots of

wardrobe’s

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wardrobe

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keys

lost

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are lost

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so it is difficult to find

suitable

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a suitable

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wardrobe and because of

this

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problem

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, I

always be

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will always be

always am

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late so, I can’t start sports at the same time as the sports team.

Secondly

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, changing

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room’s

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the room’s

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ventilation is defective. Because of the ventilation

problem

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, the air in the changing

room

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smells disgusting and it is

also

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very difficult to breathe as you can imagine. A month ago, I have reported

this

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issue with an email to Laura, the gym executive. And I

also

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filed a detailed face-to-face complaint. Though a technician visited twice and the

room

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was temporarily shut for a few hours, the

problem

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about

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with

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the ventilation remained unsolved.

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, no one took any action regarding the lost

wardrobe’s

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wardrobe

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keys. Please, talk

these

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about these

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problems with your team immediately

especially

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,especially

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both technicians and

customer’s

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customer

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executive. You should do something about the changing

room

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, if you don’t, you may lose many customers, including me. Sincerely,

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

172 words

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