in many countries, more and more people children becoming overweight and unhealthy. some people think that government should be responsible for addressing problem

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generation and mostly accounting for our future human growth and existence are always the most important part of the

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care and protection policy. It is widely believed that

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should care for young people's physical strength including their overweight issue and

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caused by an unhealthy lifestyle.

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and foremost, family and school are the most closely to children at all

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times. Parents and teachers should be the ones who are responsible for their child's health condition, including balance nutrition at home and exercise during school day time. An example can be seen is whether

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a policy to prevent children from being overweight and encourage a healthy lifestyle but if there is

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of support and corporation from their teachers and parents it would be not effective at all. At the same time, with the poor and developing countries, the governments are in urgent need to get done a long list of tasks to boost their nation's economic growth, control diseases, education, epidemic and

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have to put their all effort and all national capacity to meet the target. To sum up, it is true that the later generation is most important to our society and they should be responsible for their own physical health and

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mental strength to acquire knowledge and develop their own career path and country’s growth.

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, parents and teachers should give them clear guidelines and discipline to protect themselves from unhealthy conditions ,not the government.