Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
We live in an age when many
of
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apply
teenagers
spend their time
by chatting, surfing internet
or playing Add an article
the internet
videogames
. Some people claim thatCorrect your spelling
video games
,
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apply
teenagers
should be engaged by
community Change preposition
in
work
in their free time
. The following essay takes a look a
both sides of the argument.
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apply
To begin
with, most teenagers
too
busy at Add a missing verb
are too
schools
and Fix the agreement mistake
school
colleges
. They spent about 5-8 hours each day Fix the agreement mistake
college
to get
new knowledge and Change the verb form
getting
associate
it. Wrong verb form
associating
In addition
to this
, teachers give homework, that take
certainly 2 hours of their free Change the verb form
takes
time
. It is hard to study and work
at the same time
,
because they need Remove the comma
apply
relax
and take off the stress. Fix the infinitive
to relax
Correct your spelling
If
It
they Correct your spelling
If
not
get enough Change the verb form
do not
did not
relax
, they will harm Replace the word
relaxation
healthy
. Common death from overwork in Japan is Correct pronoun usage
their healthy
ideal
example.
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an ideal
the ideal
However
, teenagers
should help to
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apply
society
too. Schools and colleges have short and long holidays, where teenagers
have full time
free. In
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During
this
period of time
they can do community Add a comma
,time
works
. That will give able to get experience, help Fix the agreement mistake
work
to
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apply
society
and create good
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a good
relationship
with each other. Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
This
will lead to raising and growing up the society
's life level. For example
, teenagers
volunteers do a lot of impact Replace the word
teenage
to
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on
society
.
In conclusion, teenagers
should have enough relax
in their free Replace the word
relaxation
time
, but also
they should do community work
sometimes. In my opinion, adults and teenagers
should work
together and do impact
, but not overwork.Correct article usage
an impact
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