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17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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In modern society, many tasks or assignments work in groups;
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, some
people
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 believe that intellectual
skills
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 are better improved by engaging in
group
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activities
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. Personally, I would agree with
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 statement. Many reasons can support
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 idea.
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, every person is unique and has his own thoughts or logic, so when there are numerous
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 gathering together, a considerable amount of perspectives will be piled up.
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, as the discussion goes, some of the perspectives can stimulate others' thoughts and probably optimize the areas that have been neglected, leading to
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 improving intellectual levels.
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, studies have shown that many vital inventions in the world were from
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 outside the field, meaning that various and unorthodox thoughts are always required and one's capability is somehow restricted.
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, opponents would claim a lack of efficiency in
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activities
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. Since the time spent on understanding others can be long and tedious, one can always save that and train his intellectual abilities alone at home.
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, there would be many distractions in
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 situations
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 as social pressure or interpersonal
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that
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 if a person wants to hone intellectual
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, other methods should be more efficient.
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, I would argue that human beings always need somebody to provide feedback or support when learning, and there are always going to be blind spots when doing things in solitary, so
group
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activities
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 are essential. In conclusion,
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 some benefits can be observed through developing intellectual
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 oneself, I would not think those outweigh the advantages that
group
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activities
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 can provide;
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,
people
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 should take part in
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activities
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 as much as possible when it comes to the improvement of intellectual
skills
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.
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