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Some people believe that television programmes are of no real value for children. Do you agree or disgree?

#people #television #programmes #value #children #disgree
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Technology has developed in many areas and
television
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 is one of them. Different types of
programmes
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 are telecasted on cable monitors
such
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 as cartoons, horror, and family serials. Some say these
functions
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 do not provide any kind of education to the
children
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. In my mind,
television
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programmes
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 provide many valuable lessons to teenagers.
Firstly
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, the community show their talent through the broadcasted
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.
For example
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, in various countries, youngsters show their talents in music, singing, and dancing shows, so
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 fact is favourable for
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.
Moreover
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, many motivational
people
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 provide information to adults to choose the correct way in their life
television
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. They inspired a huge community. Sports programs are
also
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 inspired in many areas,
for instance
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, Virat Kohli,
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 Dhoni
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 inspiring
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a majority of young
people
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 through their way of playing. If these sports are not telecasted on
television
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,
then
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 it is impossible to learn
such
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 things. If these
programmes
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 are not telecasted,
children
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 will not learn new things.
Secondly
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,
television
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functions
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 are a source of income for
children
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. Youngsters take part in competitions on boxes and earn prizes. In different countries, parents allow participating their
children
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, so that could achieve their goals in life and will have a better lifestyle. In conclusion, tv
programmes
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 can be provided financial support.
On the other hand
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, some
television
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 serials have a bad impact on young age
people
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such
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 as love story serials. When
children
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 see
this
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 type of programme they got distracted from their studies and try to come
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 relationships. To conclude,
although
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 telecasted
programmes
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 may have bad effects on
children
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,
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apply
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they help
people
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 in many areas of sports and entertainment., and in
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 way,
children
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 are motivated and use that knowledge
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 the right place.
As a result
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, it is not bad enough to follow these programs.
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