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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disaster. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued, that rich
countries
 ought to provide relief assistance to the under-developed or developing
nations
 following a natural disaster.
This
 essay will discuss why I agree with
this
 statement because these
countries
 have a moral obligation and the financial resources to do so.
Firstly
, natural disasters often lead to a shortage of food and medical supplies.
As a result
, people suffer and can
also
 die due to outbreaks of diseases and lack of nutrition.
Thus
, the wealthier
nations
 are able to assist with emergency relief,
such
 as food, water, and medicines.
For example
, during the recent major earthquake in Tonga that caused widespread destruction, including contamination of water sources, the Australian Government provided immediate humanitarian assistance by flying in emergency supplies to help the Tongan people in need.
Secondly
, Western
countries
 have the necessary funds and big financial budgets to provide
such
 assistance. Poor
countries
 do have the money to rebuild the damaged areas and help their people in need. Without aid from these donor
countries
, these
nations
 will not be able to rebuild essential infrastructures,
such
 as school buildings, hospitals, roads and other public facilities.
Thus
,
this
 can cause significant economic and health problems for these
countries
 without financial support from the developed regional partners. Following the aftermath of Cyclone Winston in Fiji (which was the strongest Category 5 cyclone over the past decade), which wiped out almost one-
third
 of the economy, hundreds of millions of dollars in aid was received to help in rebuilding the nation. In conclusion, there will be a lot more suffering in the world if the rich
countries
 do not play their part in assisting the needy
disaster affected
Add a hyphen
disaster-affected
show examples
nations
, based on their strong financial position.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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