To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim.
The growing
of
pressures of the Change preposition
apply
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money-driven
money driven
world we live in widely cause the Add a hyphen
money-driven
gravition
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gravitation
towards
materials items. Change preposition
toward
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, persona
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personal
happiness
is not achieved through things like work, wealth and success. Through
these things may be attractive and coveted, it does not refute the fact that Correct your spelling
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relationship
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relationships
are
the genuine secrets to living happily. Change the verb form
is
This
will be proven by bringing up the topic of wealthy superstars who steadily live lonely lives and the Correct your spelling
advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
elderly
people based on their Change preposition
of elderly
happiness
.
Firstly
, lack
the love Correct article usage
a lack
security
might influence people’s welfare and decrease the life quality. Correct word choice
and security
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, Sulli from South Korea used to be one of the most successful K-Pop star
in the entertainment industry. Unfortunately in 2018, Sulli Change to a plural noun
stars
found
dead inside her apartment despite the fact that she Add a missing verb
was found
just
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had just
ad
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had
the
conversation with her fans the day before. She Correct article usage
a
was
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since
the depression was overwhelmed by the negative thoughts. Correct word choice
because
Moreover
, because of
mental illness prevent her to willing to share, none of Sulli’s fellow colleagues or her family member spot the symptoms of anxiety or mental disorder while communicating with her. Change preposition
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Although
owns the
major legacy and Correct article usage
a
the
bright career, it is Correct article usage
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the
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an
obstacles
for her to Fix the agreement mistake
obstacle
seek
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seeking
the
real Correct article usage
apply
happiness
.
Conversly
, genuine joy can find in little moments around us without the need Correct your spelling
Conversely
of
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for
materials
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material
objects
. Okinawa is an island located in Japan is having the most Correct word choice
or objects
longitivity
and happiest community in the world. Through the experiment made in Okinawa by Correct your spelling
longevity
scientist
years ago, the results turned out Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
Okinawas
are not only remaining Correct your spelling
Okinawa's
the
good relationship with their neighbours as normal, but they take that as the premise to build Correct article usage
a
the
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a
fulfill
life. Once again, keeping up with the relationship whether in small circles or Change the form of the verb
fulfilling
have
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the
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a
vital Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
aspects
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aspect
decided
if Change the form of the verb
decide
that
people reach their highest point of satisfaction or not.
As explained above, genuine Correct determiner usage
apply
happiness
can never be bought by wealth and everyone gets to realise this
when they become old. It is true that the
relationships with friends, colleagues and family member and family members can create joy. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, the greater the love you give, the greater you receive.Submitted by cynthiaquynhphan on
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