Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation.

There is a common belief that
convenience
food
productions are
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substituting
gradually traditional
foods
and these methods. I firmly disagree with
this
trend, as now will be discussed/ To commence, there always has
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demand for cooking old categories of
food
. One of the major facts
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related
to
this
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demand
is that every
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year
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of people entering in plenty of traditional
food
cooking classes. Since they all went to cook delicious meals not only for themselves but
also
for their family and close relatives. In Viet Nam,
for example
, the
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of teenagers and adults approaching and learning how to cook traditional meals never
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clearer
to grow.
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Conveniently
,
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survey conducted by journalists
in
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globe
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displays that over 60% of people admitted to
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a traditional meal for their family if they have enough time.
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, lots of
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inhabitants
around the world believe that Despite having
the
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convenience
,
convenience
foods
like
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, KFC chicken and so on
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contains
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contain
fats and loads of toxic
subtences
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substances
which are
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undoubtfully
not good for people’s
healthy
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.
Thus
people frequently
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an
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effort
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effort
to enjoy traditional
foods
either at a restaurant or at home. For
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, after their
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hours, more than
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half
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of workers have lunch at traditional restaurants
instead
of
convenience
food
stores.
In addition
, in 2022,
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of restaurants have climbed dramatically due to the needs of
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customer
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customers
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.
As a result
,
convenience
foods
can not replace traditional
foods
. To recapitulate , again, I do disagree about the wrong
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awareness
about the replacement of traditional of the society.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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