Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation.

In developed countries, convenience

food

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will become popular and familiar. Some

people

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think that they will replace traditional

foods

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and traditional methods of

food

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preparations

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, in my view, I think it will

common

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but I disagree it will replace traditional

foods

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. Nowadays, fast

food

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can be useful for

people

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who are busy or work a long time in

office

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the office

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because they cannot prepare

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foods

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food

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so they can go to the convenience

foods

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store to buy

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foods

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food

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, many fast

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outlets are good choices for couples to

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gor

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for a date.

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, some

people

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do not like cooking because they have to prepare a lot of ingredients before cooking so they prefer eating prepared

foods

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, these packed

foods

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cannot replace traditional

foods

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and

its

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methods in each country, especially in Vietnam. When

worshing

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worshipping

ancestors, Vietnamese

people

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have to cook their traditional

foods

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and offer them

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alter to pay their respect.

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same

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people

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still

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llike

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cooking because they like the family atmosphere when everyone eats together.

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, many important celebrations

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as lunar new year, wedding,

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,… have to cook traditional

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. In conclusion, convenience

foods

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have common with everyone but

people

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will have a lot of

disease

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if they eat too many unhealthy

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, I still choose traditional

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not only their attractiveness of colour and

tast

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taste

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but

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the healthy they are. No matter how fast

foods

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developed. It still cannot replace traditional

foods

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and its methods

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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation.

As you wish to apply for an educational program abroad, you are writing a letter to a university’s admission department. Ask for both the pedagogic facilities and offers, and the funding options.

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets are responsible for reducing the packaging of goods. At the same time, others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?