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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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There are two opposite points of view living among societies about which
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 is the better type of school for single or mixed sex. I firmly believe both of them can give different benefits to the
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.
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, for the single, the benefit could come from the
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' life inside the school. All the scholars could focus and have the freedom to express themselves without worries because of the opposite gender. Some of them have a personality they do not want their opposite sex to see.
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, that freedom could bring a higher impact to the scholars,
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 as the development of creativity, focuses, and ability to work as a team.
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, because of the product, the purpose of the study will be easier to achieve.
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, mixed schools
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 have their own advantages, which support the pupils to achieve their goals in their studies. The most significant benefit is the competitiveness between schoolboys and schoolgirls. Because of their own gender ego, none want to be the loser, which is very good to push the pupils to learn harder than ever. Another benefit is the environment that mixed schools have is the same as the real
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 outside of school.
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 could prepare the pupils to face the real world, especially the office world. To conclude, both types have their own part as supporting tools to help the
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 to face the real world. From my point of view, to give a stance on which
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 is better needs the influence of the
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 themselves because each student has different needs, and
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 means each of them will get a different impact from other schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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