Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

About 40 to 50 years ago, our
country
faced
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the
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war to take back our lands. Everyone just focused to find how to free ethnic from shackles. Now, we own our
country
and live in the developing one.
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care is education and everything
relate
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to it
have
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conflicting opinions. Many
people
say that
universities
should only offer places to young
students
with the highest marks, while others say they should accept
people
of all ages, even if they did not do well at
school
.
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universities
are always for
students
. Almost
students
graduated
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who graduated
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from
the
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high
school
will take the national high
school
exam to apply
for
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to
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their
favorite
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universities
. The rest apply
for
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to
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the
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apply
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college or
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vocational
school
. The
students
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student's
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study
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who study
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in
universities
have
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the
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higher score than the other ones. They are the young generation to take over our
country
in the future. So we want to take care
them
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of them
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,
give
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and give
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them the best education we have,
this
is not wrong. As
i
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said, our
country
is developing, we have many problems in many areas to solve. We do not have too
much source
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many sources
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so we should give them to young
students
. 4 years in the
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universities
universites
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university
is very important to
students
. They can set their mind, habit and relationship. Creating
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fresh and active environment is the thing we should do.
In addition
, to live in that environment, they always
to
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renew themselves, update new information to overcome the other
people
, and help them improve day by day. But Lenin said: "Learn, learn more, learn forever". Our
country
does not ban
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adults or
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old
people
from studying. Studying is their right. Maybe
in
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the
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young age, they do not have
chance
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a chance
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to study. Now they can afford to
it
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do it
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and they can spend time doing it. The
universities
can exclusive the room only for
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adults and old
people
. They pay money for studying, the benefit
belong
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belongs
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to the
universities
. And with the
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knowledge
knowlegde
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knowledge
they learnt, they can make more money for our
country
. Two views both have right and wrong, but
i
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I
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think
them
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they
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start from patriotism. I love my
country
so much. I want everyone
have
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fair treatment, everyone can study what they want. And just uniting, we will make our
country
developed
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develop
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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