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Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a student's level. Other people believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learner and tell us very little about theri acutal ability. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #exams #student #level #pressure #learner #theri #ability
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 system in every country follows different rules but
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one
point
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 all of
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meets
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learners
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exam
. There are some
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 and cons of taking
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. While some people agreed that taking
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the exam
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exam
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 is the way to evaluate
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a learner's
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knowledge
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meantime
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mean time
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meantime
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other
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others
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 think that it's nothing but only giving pressure
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 them.
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 of
all
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 we can say that it is very important to
assessing
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 a student's
knowledge
.
For example
,
One
 may study for a time period but
do
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not get any
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knowledge
knowlwdge
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knowledge
 from the course. By taking
exams
teacher
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teachers
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 can understand the level of
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understanding
undrestanding
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understanding
 of the learners.
Secondly
, without any
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one
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lose
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loose
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lose
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 his/her interest
of
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 learning. Like when a student
have
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 to give
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an exam
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 he/she may learn and get
knowledge
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exam
also
 there is some fear to face
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the exam
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 and that insists them
to
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learn well. Most importantly when a tutee have
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pressure to get
good
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a good
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 result
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they
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 concentrate
their
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 lessons more as they know if they give more effort they will get more chance to do better results.
On the other
hand
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 some people
thinks
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 that
exams
 are only nothing but extra pressure on freshmen and
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give
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 very little feedback about their actual ability. In some
cases
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 it may
right
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be right
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 that kids may get frightened of
exam
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exams
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 and
loose
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interests
interest
intersts
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interest
of
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in
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 going to
institute
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the institute
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.
Similarly
 only
evaluting
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evaluating
 through
exams
 may focus only a short portion of
one
's
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knowledge
knoledge
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knowledge
 but he/she may have much broad
knowledge
then
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 that. In
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
,
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everything
everythin
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everything
 has both good and bad sides as well
exams
. In my
opinion
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One
 may assess by other aspects including
exams
.
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