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Computer games has its problems. What are these problems and possible solutions.

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Virtual gaming has become a pressing problem of our generation. There are various issues associated with
this
 new trend. Major concerns are regarding the health and social skills of the individuals who are involved in
this
 act.
However
, most of the problems can be solved with proper guidance from teachers and
parents
.
First
 of all, due to gaming addiction, people will not opt to go outside and engage in any physical activities, rather they will be sitting at their house and playing virtual
games
. Lack of physical
games
 will inversely affect health, which eventually leads to obesity and other health issues. Another issue will be lacking social skills. People who are so involved in
this
 virtual world will not be having basic socializing skills needed for their lives.
For instance
, people who are so involved in
games
 won't find adequate time to hang out with friends.
As a result
, they may become introverts in the later part of their life. There are two solutions to tackle
this
 problem effectively.
Firstly
,
parents
 and teachers should make these
children
 learn the importance of socializing and the need of having good friends in their lives.
In addition
 to
this
,
parents
 should take extra efforts to make sure their
children
 are having sufficient physical activities needed for a healthy life. Apart from
this
,
parents
 should restrict the time they are involved with
games
. These steps if followed appropriately will help the
children
 to come out of their addiction and can lead a healthy life. In conclusion, computer
games
 can be deteriorating for
children
 but these side effects can be controlled to a great extent with the help of teachers and
parents
.
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