Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Since time immemorial the threat of imprisonment has been used to enforce justice by putting convicted
criminals
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behind bars. In
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argue that prison is not the most effective solution for reducing crime and thereby disagree with the premise. Prisons these days are creating even more hardened
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and are partly responsible for a steady rise in violent
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for decades. Imprisoning people has become a
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solution for a society which is unwilling to solve the real problems of mental
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, poverty and a biased judicial system.
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, in the US minorities that committed even petty
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can be imprisoned for
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up to
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10 years. The person who entered the penal system might have been a small-time drug offender or a petty criminal. But, by the time he exits the prison, is most likely to have affiliations to a criminal gang. It does not help that once an ex-convict re-enters society he or she will most likely be unable to get a decent job. So, most people end up turning back to their previous gangs in search of a sense of family and to earn money. It is thereby not a surprise that minor
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are now the ones committing even more serious
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, what prisons end up doing is creating hardened
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who are likely to commit even more
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. Most Nordic countries have already been effective in reducing crime through a combination of better education and increased access to mental
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services. In countries like Norway,
criminals
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are treated like human beings who can be reformed. They review the mental
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health related
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ailments of the inmate and provide the necessary treatments required. While
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improving the mental status of the inmate they
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provide trade
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training or access to education with a pathway charted to lead to a job upon release. These interventions have been immensely successful and
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countries like Norway have the lowest incarceration rates in the world. In conclusion, prisons are not
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effective in reducing crime and end up exacerbating the issue it intends to solve
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, the prisoners based on the type and severity of
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offense
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committed need to be reformed through a combination of education and mental
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interventions.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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